Well, set back 3000 words. That scene wasn't working. I was losing the tension and urgency of the situation, which must be there in order for anyone to want to keep reading. We don't want pages of people talking; it has to be interspersed with action. It at least has to do directly with Jet and what he's facing. Immediacy. His problems.
And focus on one thing at a time, otherwise get bogged down in the complexity and lose Jet and the whole tone and focus of the story.
At least that's my rationalization for why the scene wasn't working. Mainly it wasn't something that made me want to know what happened next; it was an overall feeling more than anything, so it had to go.
And focus on one thing at a time, otherwise get bogged down in the complexity and lose Jet and the whole tone and focus of the story.
At least that's my rationalization for why the scene wasn't working. Mainly it wasn't something that made me want to know what happened next; it was an overall feeling more than anything, so it had to go.
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